Under-smart? You must be kidding. That essay was really clever. The child author has a very vivid way of expressing himself that most lack, and since I’ve read some flat-out ridiculous things and second-grade level spelling errors written by you yourself, I think you might want to save your criticisms for someone else.
yup (whoever runs this website) you were right. Over-weight and under-smart.
I like plain donuts, but then again, I’m not a fat sloppy P.O.S.
Apparently drm and blah never finished middle school. None of my students ever turned in an essay to me with that many commas in each sentence.
I like the frustration the writer feels. I love the ending, where he/she is so angry he/she just uses exclamation points! It’s a Bagel! A BAGEL! Awesome.
This is flipping hilarious. When I was in high school, I had to write an essay about something I hated. Amidst the thought provoking tombs on crime and teen pregnancy and poverty was my work on Brussels Sprouts. 32 years later, I still hate them, but I sure loved the A on the paper for original thought.
Very well written, also does a good job creating the scene visually, and working up to the point by keeping everything tied together. Unsure if he maybe just copied a humorous rant he heard an adult make at some point however.
Shoot, my son did this in 2nd grade! Count the times he repeats himself for emphasis… count his lovely descriptive words… count the words he using while listing items. My son was the king of “creative” writing! Almost all of his teachers got a kick out of it. Used to drive me crazy! He could finish in almost exactly the required number of words for whatever assignment he received! (See the word count at the bottom of the page.)